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stone man cometh by ~Ghrey:iconGhrey:



Heft the stick in palms eager with beady eyes blaring out
hate crimes long plains small figure lone prey
raise the leg once, twice, flatwhiteplain cometh, small shrubs cometh,
in the first hefting of the stick there is silence, snapped twig-limb from mother tree, reverence
from the first lifting of the dirtgray hardsolid to the breaking, to the hitting and cracking
there is the sound of new deaths,
counters to all reasons of life and living; struggle for ease and in creating create comfort, ways to kill and sharpen, to release life,
such that big whiteplain and loneprey figure
are man place and food place with fingers to grasp at the sun’s beings and
teeth to rip out the light from the eyes of the nerved, frightful few
fleeing from the monsters that have brewed a new domination over the greatwhiteplains, bloodmess and purple brownbone snap
creakingmountain, cavescript, rainless
that the world turns quiet for itself,
shifting for the cold man stoneman rising through.
©2009 ~Ghrey
:iconghrey:

Author's Comments

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I deliberately took from Faulkner and Julia Terese

I'm starting NaPoWriMo

This was finished at 11:59, and in my book that counts

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:iconpereubuisjesus:
I like how you combined several words into one word. Interesting.

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See you space cowboy...
:icon4moku2:
A wonderful perspective of both thought and time. :)

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I'd rather know I was crazy than think I was sane.

~Member of the 3eyes [link] club! Inanely Inspired Insanity~ =)
:iconbeatingmyheart:
i agree with pereubuisjesus, that's pretty cool

just one thing. for ease and in creating create comfort. what does this mean?
:iconghrey:
Thanks man.

~juliaterese does it better.

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Bore, n.: A person who talks when you wish him to listen.
:iconghrey:
:w00t: Awesome man, you got the idea of time! I'm trying to stick with a theme and time is my theme.

It's going to be a challenge, hahaha.

Thanks for the comment, I really appreciate it.

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Bore, n.: A person who talks when you wish him to listen.
:iconghrey:
Oh, I know it's not very clear, my bad:

"counters to all reasons of life and living: struggle,
for ease and in creating create comfort, ways to kill and sharpen, to release life
such that"

basically:
stones are counters to the reason of life, which is struggling, and are counters for ease and in creating (tools, creating tools) create comfort

I don't know if I want that comma after struggle, but I also don't want to end up like oscar wilde and spend a day adding it back in and taking it back out over and over

so I'll leave it and come back again later.

oh, and thanks so much for the comment! I love the fact that you leave words behind. :heart: :)

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Bore, n.: A person who talks when you wish him to listen.
:icon4moku2:
Time is probably not a bad choice - I could certainly think of worse ones. :)

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I'd rather know I was crazy than think I was sane.

~Member of the 3eyes [link] club! Inanely Inspired Insanity~ =)
:iconpereubuisjesus:
whoa thanks for the tip! she really is awesome.

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See you space cowboy...
:iconbeatingmyheart:
aw you're welcome :heart:

haha i'm still lost, but that's okay. i think i sort of get the idea....kind of

=]

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