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silver festoons plummet
over sorry heads
as I cover deeper my illmilk hair, my fingers
wrapped so tight in bands,
furlined bands to keep out what is not of body.

what is cold
but lack of mother's chest
of father's back
of teethprey in heap?
is cold just groundfur, everywhere, coatlike?

is it not creation?
to fight against groundfur, to live.
no groundfur, no life. only groundmother,
only stone.

from where groundfur comes: a shedding
in reverse;
if skymother babies
wrap around all of us
who is to say I cannot be
boygroundbaby of the sky?

groundmother, coated in skymother's cold
greeting fingers, thousands, dainty, tiny;

when I proud and strong boy,
when I make strong hunt
and I am man and am herd leader
become flesheater fur cleaner
and older with grayfur
I will take groundmother of groundfur
hold it in my arms and there be
enwrapped in her,
plead to airchild, breathless,
plead to skybabies, soundless,
to let me skybound enwrap
the things I love;

keep on, valley of snow, valley of ice,
move through groundfur, feet crunch,
follow bigprey to field, slow bigbeast,
shiver at soulwarmth taking walk.
©2009 ~Ghrey
:iconghrey:

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edit: july 12 09 6:15am

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:icon4moku2:
I think I will have to reread this one...I have the caveman still stuck in my head. :)

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:iconghrey:
go for it
by the way, I really love this one.
tell me what you think.

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Bore, n.: A person who talks when you wish him to listen.
:icon4moku2:
This left me with an image of a man walking around an airport with tinfoil wrapped around his head, hitting on the nuns asking for donations to save babies in Africa. Probably not what you intended, but I enjoyed it. :)

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I'd rather know I was crazy than think I was sane.

~Member of the 3eyes [link] club! Inanely Inspired Insanity~ =)
:iconnecrofeelyouryack:
Very interesting! :) Your persona's whole perspective and speach really give a unique picture of airplane travel.

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"If you bring forth what is within you, what you bring forth will save you. If you do not bring forth what is within you, what you do not bring forth will destroy you."
:iconghrey:
thank you.
the problem is, I didn't write it about airplane travel.
I wrote it from the perspective of a child in the distant past,
ice age?
how can I make it clearer what time is it without sacrificing the persona?

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Bore, n.: A person who talks when you wish him to listen.
:iconghrey:
hey, I'm glad you enjoyed it.
the point of view is, though, of a child in the past, when it is very cold.
though nuns might work. I don't know. :)

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Bore, n.: A person who talks when you wish him to listen.
:iconnecrofeelyouryack:
Oops, my bad. I thought "skybabies" and whatnot were a reference to airplanes after reading your artist's comments. :XD: Come to think of it, I wouldn't have made a connection between the two without reading your author's comments... So I certainly wouldn't suggest changing anything about your piece.

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"If you bring forth what is within you, what you bring forth will save you. If you do not bring forth what is within you, what you do not bring forth will destroy you."
:iconghrey:
thank goodness! thanks. :)
I added a little to the end and around here and there and hopefully made it more clear.

all good. :) you rock for leaving words for me. :D

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Bore, n.: A person who talks when you wish him to listen.
:iconnecrofeelyouryack:
Lol, happy to be commentative. :)

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"If you bring forth what is within you, what you bring forth will save you. If you do not bring forth what is within you, what you do not bring forth will destroy you."

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